bigbee Offline Upload & Sell: Off
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Not to belabor the point, but the one with the eyes really sends the mesaage "the perfect gift for someone that you want to look possessed and scary." Tone back the eyes and use a color typically found in humans and not horror movie characters. Can you also find a nice chain, rather than a string?
As for the text, I think you need a brand name or business name in the largest font at the top. The phrase "individually hand-crafted glass pendants" (note the hyphen) should be a subtitle in the more readable font used for the rest of the copy. I would also eliminate the section on breakability and the bullet on the time required to make them. Establish the value based on appearance and uniqueness, not on the labor costs involved.
Seems like an interesting project, and you're off to a great start. With a few tweaks, you'll have something that can be successful.
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