lisy78
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PD79,
I never saw the previous (feminine?) logo ... so I can't comment on whether the current one is a significant improvement or not. It's ok, I guess.. though I'm not crazy about the italics on the "Photography", or that "stylish, modern" appears to be part of the logo but isn't contained by the brackets.
If you really want to hear what I think... then keep reading, but you're not going to like it.
Let me start by pointing out that I am personally not linking my WWW at this time because IMHO "MY" site sux. So I'm not making these comments from a position of "mine is better'.
That being said:
1. There are spelling and grammar errors in various places on the site to name a couple just from your Rocking Albums section:
a. Kiss Mini's should be Kiss Minis
b. Simplisity is not in fact a word. Simplicity is.
c. neither is Distintive though I guess that's a Distincitive way of spelling ... Distinctive 
d. migetized is not a word... I'm pretty sure neither is midgetized but at least that made-up word would use midget as it's root... miget is not a word. Miniaturized would be an actual word that works in that context.
e. I know what your looking for ... <--- no you don't ... I'm looking for decently edited copy. ... that should read "I know what you're looking for"
f. companys -> companies
g. Back to that "I know what you're looking for" thing... you then say "stylish, and yet showcase the special moments in your life" ... that doesn't make much sense to me. Usually the Something YET Something construct is used to combine otherwise seemingly contrasting things. So for instance you would write "Modern yet timeless" or "Strong yet gentle" ... even if you got the sentence structure corrected I don't think the idea of wanting something stylish and wanting something that showcases the special moments in one's life are contrasting 
2. I'm a very fast reader, and I can't read some of your slides as they flash past. This is most noticeable on pages where the text describes the images... for instance where you write about your Kiss Minis I can either look at the minis or I can read the text. In practice I was getting distressed by not being able to do both. The slide with "I know what youre looking for" I actually challenged myself to speed-read it and could only get to "are" in the second to last row before it would move on.
3. Your logo sometimes shows up over white were it's partially unreadable, some other times it clashes with your captions... for instance on the splash page when the {Love} one shows up with the guy in the yellow shirt {Love} and {Phenom} are partially overlapped.
4. I don't know what potential clients think when they read blogs, whether they expect proper spelling/grammar or not (chances are many of them wouldn't even notice?), but I subscribe to a number of blogs and while informal tone is always welcome grammatical/spelling errors are not common. You have quite a few of both just in the first posting I read. You might want to consider finding an English major who would proofread in exchange for portraits or something.
5. I'm also not particularly crazy about the square running around the frame transition
Now finally... for a positive comment:
Your wife is beautiful
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