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p.1 #1 · Cabin Breeze

Found this recently.
I have never been sure about this image.
Seems like it has potential, but I'm not sure if this works.
Thoughts?

1. My typical processing.
2. Velvia Preset applied in LR.

As usual, feel free to play.

Thx
Scott

Dec 06, 2008 at 07:18 PM

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p.1 #2 · Cabin Breeze

Hi, Scott... I like your typical processing - gentle, soft and calm - I can feel the light and lazy breeze, it has atmosphere...

the Velvia Preset is too loud for me

Best, Bee

Dec 06, 2008 at 08:34 PM

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p.1 #3 · Cabin Breeze

I like the images Scott.

The second one just a bit too intense.
Have you tried in b&w? I am not sure this image actually benefits from color.

Dec 06, 2008 at 09:09 PM

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p.1 #4 · Cabin Breeze

I enjoy the sweet blue hue's contrast to the natural tans of the first version. I would suggest a little sharpening and possibly a small bump in saturation. For me it's not a "grab and shake me to get my attention" image, but a peaceful and pleasant one.

Dec 07, 2008 at 12:26 AM

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p.1 #5 · Cabin Breeze

hey here's the ol' 5 minute retouch on that just for kicks - it would probably be better with an original file - i ran into some noise and artifacts that probably aren't there in the orig.

This image is copyrighted by the owner

one thing about this picture, something i didn't bother to address in my retouch (but i might if it were my picture and i were spending more time on it) is the hot-spot right smack dab in the middle of the image. it kind of cripples the composition to a degree - would be better to tone it down or remove it i think.

my 2¢

Dec 07, 2008 at 04:46 AM

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p.1 #6 · Cabin Breeze

Thanks, Bee. Sounds like the original did capture the atmosphere correctly.

Kaden,
I think you are right. Too much in the second. I dont think I can make it work as a BW.

Karen (or do I have to call you AuntiPode, even though its a great screeen name for a gal down under..), appreciate the suggestions. Will do.

Lemurofdoom (not your original name, is it?), appreciate your input. The hot spot has to cool down. Thanks.

Scott

Dec 09, 2008 at 01:21 AM

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p.1 #7 · Cabin Breeze

Call me anything, except late for dinner. :-)

Dec 09, 2008 at 01:26 AM

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p.1 #8 · Cabin Breeze

no my real name is Dan

Dec 09, 2008 at 01:28 AM

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p.1 #9 · Cabin Breeze

The composition does not work for me. The framing starts well into the window and the picture does not have a central subject. I think closer in or further away because it looks too square.

Dec 09, 2008 at 05:48 AM

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Dec 09, 2008 at 06:37 AM

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p.1 #11 · Cabin Breeze

Hey, Kaden.
That's nice.
You were right.
Thanks.
Scott

Dec 09, 2008 at 09:42 AM

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p.1 #12 · Cabin Breeze

Color and mood are more appealing to me in the first shot; the preset is too garish for my taste. I like the image, but were it mine I'd tone down the hot spot between the windows. It's a bullseye for me.

Bob

Dec 14, 2008 at 05:11 PM

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p.1 #13 · Cabin Breeze

The shadow area near the top of the photo is like a black hole for my eyes. I keep getting sucked up there no matter what else is going on in the composition. I also get the feeling that I want to step to the left and view the windows directly so everything is square. Sometimes shots of windows and doors straight on can be very interesting shots.

Dec 15, 2008 at 05:54 AM

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