I enjoy the sweet blue hue's contrast to the natural tans of the first version. I would suggest a little sharpening and possibly a small bump in saturation. For me it's not a "grab and shake me to get my attention" image, but a peaceful and pleasant one.
hey here's the ol' 5 minute retouch on that just for kicks - it would probably be better with an original file - i ran into some noise and artifacts that probably aren't there in the orig. http://www.lemurofdoom.com/fm/windowsForSbeme.jpg
one thing about this picture, something i didn't bother to address in my retouch (but i might if it were my picture and i were spending more time on it) is the hot-spot right smack dab in the middle of the image. it kind of cripples the composition to a degree - would be better to tone it down or remove it i think.
The composition does not work for me. The framing starts well into the window and the picture does not have a central subject. I think closer in or further away because it looks too square.
Color and mood are more appealing to me in the first shot; the preset is too garish for my taste. I like the image, but were it mine I'd tone down the hot spot between the windows. It's a bullseye for me.
The shadow area near the top of the photo is like a black hole for my eyes. I keep getting sucked up there no matter what else is going on in the composition. I also get the feeling that I want to step to the left and view the windows directly so everything is square. Sometimes shots of windows and doors straight on can be very interesting shots.
The second one just a bit too intense.