Upload & Sell: On
Your rendering has a very "artistic" vibe to it that makes it seem as though you want it to look that way intentionally. That makes it a bit challenging to critique, but Scott has done a good job of it.
Your version kinda reminds me of a charcoal drawing, or what a "ghost" might look like ... if that makes any sense.
Took a stab, trying out a mixture of things to experiment with. I was a bit "torn" @ the fly. In your rendering, I think it adds to the character of the image. Mine, I kept seeing it as a distraction. As always, S&P to taste.