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Hi Ernie. My suggestions/observations:
- Main light seems too high. It's not making it into his eyes and it's causing some pretty harsh shadows at the hairline and below the eyes.
- Over-all exposure seems too high although it is difficult to say whether this is due to lights too strong (particularly the main) or over-exposure in camera.
- Fill light is too strong. It appears that an on-camera flash was used for fill and it looks like it was zoomed primarily onto the face. I say that because his neck is brightly exposed but there is still a fairly dark shadow under the lapels of his shirt. The small on-camera flash is also providing the catchlights and since no flash modifier was apparently used, the catchlights are very small, bright, and sharp. I normally don't care for that effect. I think it normally works better to move the large main light so it gets into the eyes and use that for the catchlights. The fact that the fill has exposed his neck so brightly gives the impression that he has no chin.
Here is an example with Photoshop tricks to try to illustrate my lighting comments above. It's quick and dirty and not meant as a perfect retouch. Most of what I did was to do burning and dodging to simulate different lighting. I also replaced the existing catchlights with large, off-center ones. I also added a subtle vignette, cropped to a more standard portrait, and cloned out the tip of the pen.
If you want me to remove the example, just send me a PM.