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Part of his facial skin has turned gray in this processing. Not sure if you really intended to do that or not; but if so, it doesn't work for me. The white vignette, as mentioned already, is way too heavy for me. When vignettes work (IMO), it's usually a subtle look.
Not sure why you felt it needed so much pop. It actually looks like the original is a very nice photograph.