First post and looking for C&C
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sjoerger
Registered: Dec 05, 2008
Total Posts: 30
Country: United States

Hello everyone. Been looking through the forum postings quite a bit and like what I've seen so far.

I am looking for some feedback on my images below. The second is just a tighter crop of the first, yet I still can not decide which crop I like better. I am fairly new to portrait photography, but am definitely finding the challenges fun.

Thank you for taking the time look.

Steve




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sbeme
Registered: Dec 23, 2003
Total Posts: 11903
Country: United States

Welcome!
Beautiful woman.
Great job with the expression, eye contact, sharpness.
I prefer the tighter crop. Only wish her hand wasnt in the image. It looks bizarrely detaiched, entering from somewhere else.
I think if you showed it to your non-photographer friends, all would be impressed and no one would comment. But, to improve, you need a slightly different pose.
One other area to improve. Seems like either more mascara and/or shadowing arond her right eye and you could cautiously lighteni this spot.
I like the way the light falls off on the left edge of the frame.

Scott



sjoerger
Registered: Dec 05, 2008
Total Posts: 30
Country: United States

Thanks Scott!



AuntiPode
Registered: Aug 05, 2008
Total Posts: 4583
Country: New Zealand

The second crop is better because it trims parts of the image that don't add to it. For PP, have you tried a little vignette for the lower right corner to dim the brightness of her upper arm? The pose exaggerates the size of her upper arm. A slightly different angle and/or a longer lens would help. Also lifting her chin might improve it as a portrait.



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