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Bob Jarman
Registered: Feb 04, 2007
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do anything for anyone? Not sure about the aesthetics - I liked so I captured it.

What would you do differently? Or, would you simply have moved on to something else?



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PS - for all who celebrate Thanksgiving or perhaps a similar holiday around this time of year, have a great holiday!

Bob


digitalbug30d
Registered: Apr 01, 2008
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well I like pics like this always wanting to do some like this...just dont know how..like the simplicity of it



sbeme
Registered: Dec 23, 2003
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Interesting, creative, and very appealing image, Bob. Love the use of light, shallow depth of field, the capture of the leaves along separate vertical and horizontal planes. The bit of shadow detail on the right adds some additional context, depth, intrigue.

Possible improvements: bring back the tip of the smaller leaf lower right, if possible.
A bit more along the right border, especially on the bottom.

Cant decide about the crop. I think it feels off, but then it gets me to come back, look more. Maybe just a bit off the bottom?

Glad to see your shooting again!
Scott



Scott Stoness
Registered: Sep 11, 2006
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It is clean and simple with a nice background.

For me it needs more depth and more space to the left of the leaf (it looks too tight). Perhaps a bit off the top.

Scott



Bob Jarman
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@digitalbug30d, Scott G, Scott S,

Thanks for the feedback and kind comments. This is a self-assignment of sorts. I've been following several photographic blogs. One in particular, of George Barr, discusses visualization, i.e. 'seeing', to recognize interesting patterns in everyday, local surroundings. His point, and I'm not doing it justice, is to seek scenes and patterns that interest you such as a tangle of brush, gnarled roots, tree bark, etc. rather than looking for 'photographs'. An interesting example in visualization referred to on another forum: Look at the FedEx logo - what do you see?

I'm not inclined to do street or city shooting, and do not feel comfortable capturing people I don't know or just happen upon, so I meandered about the yard looking for items of 'interest' - this happened to be one. I'll return to others with a tripod.

Scott S: I knew you'd 'ding' me for the left edge of the leaf ....

regards,

Bob



Bob Jarman
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A differently cropped version...




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sbeme
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Feels far more balanced, less unusual. I think its better.

Scott



Kaden K.
Registered: Mar 14, 2008
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I like both images Bob and in particular the 2nd crop. It does hoodles for me. Love
the darkness and the usage of DOF. Very much in line with the Japanese style of
IKI.



Bob Jarman
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@sbeme, @Kaden,

Thanks for the feedback; a result of earlier comments and a suggestion from one of our Art Professors.

Kaden, I must admit my ignorance and uninformed-ness - off to google and learn about IKI

regards,

Bob



Scott Stoness
Registered: Sep 11, 2006
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2nd crop much better for me but I would crop a bit more off the right to have a smidge less tree. Its amazing what a crop can do to improve. I like the mores space below than above to give gravity.



digitalbug30d
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Bob I like the second crop alot more...didnt think about orientation need to start thinking this stuff...



silvawispa
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1st one didn't touch me, except for enjoying the negative space around the leaves, the second one however is much nicer. Puts me in mind of a Chinese ideogram

Contrary to Scott however, I think the balance might be slightly nicer with 2-3% taken off the left, but that is probably entirely personal taste.



Bob Jarman
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silvawispa wrote:
1st one didn't touch me, except for enjoying the negative space around the leaves, the second one however is much nicer. Puts me in mind of a Chinese ideogram

Contrary to Scott however, I think the balance might be slightly nicer with 2-3% taken off the left, but that is probably entirely personal taste.


@silvawispa ,

Thanks for the comments and suggestion - I'll look at cropping a bit from left and right (separately), at this moment I'd remove about 1/2" from the right, but then when I look later I'll probably change my mind :



Bob Jarman
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Scott Stoness wrote:
2nd crop much better for me but I would crop a bit more off the right to have a smidge less tree. Its amazing what a crop can do to improve. I like the mores space below than above to give gravity.


Agreed, and 2nd is much better for me also.

regards,

Bob



Bob Jarman
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digitalbug30d wrote:
Bob I like the second crop alot more...didnt think about orientation need to start thinking this stuff...


Me too! In retrospect I'd say the horizontal orientation of the leaves was opposing (perhaps the proper phrase is creating tension?) the vertical frame in the first, but I would never have 'seen' that without trying the horizontal crop. Maybe someday recognizing these things will become second nature...

regards,

Bob



lemurofdoom
Registered: Sep 05, 2007
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i like the second crop a lot better



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