I like it other than the fact that her makeup looks really clumpy. Maybe the light is too harsh?

I think your lighting is well done, but the pose is wrong. Her eyes look disembodied and a little unreal. I think moving you (or her) back about 20 degrees or so towards center would work better.

stevemaller wrote:
I think your lighting is well done, think moving you (or her) back about 20 degrees or so towards center would work better.

+1


I don't see clumps in the makeup? Still... a nice shot.

Hatch

The biggest problem for me is the highlight in the ear when the rest of that side of her head is in soft shadow.
Her head is turned enough so that her eyes not right either.

I like the shot and the composition. I find the eyes a little bold, but that's what she likes, probably. The hair is framing the face nicely.

The only small point I will mention is that her eyes are "too far over" and partly hidden.

Hi.

Tough audience eh?

I think you made a nice image of this type.

Pretty model, nice light, good "connection" with engaging eye expression.

Much, much, better than most would make.

Is there anything I saw that might take a little correction or different approach?

1. The skin tone and color of lips looks a little "off color" to me. I am not sure why, but it appears a little "cool" to me (not warm enough).

2. The eyes do not bother me with their position. They look "natural" to me at the direction to the viewer. The only thing that keeps them from being "perfect" is the bit of hair that crosses the iris in the near eye.

But...those are somewhat minor points. Overall, I think you did make a nice image of a very pretty model.

I hope these comments help and encourage you.

thx guys. appreciate all the comments

2 more shots

These last two are very nice! Even though the head area in the seated shot is a little under exposed

You are going to need a larger light source or you can move your light source closer. Judging by the catchlight the light source is far away. Also, a soft rim light would be more flattering as it would bring out the neck/face hair.

hatch1921 wrote:

I don't see clumps in the makeup? Still... a nice shot.

Hatch


Sorry, not so much clumps as the eye makeup seems to be a little to thick. It just doesn't look really smooth.

thx for all the comments. appreciate them.

final series...

Lovely!