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 p.1 #4 · More D1 Hockey DU-Minesota State | |
It looks like you had a better second go at this! Shooting from the catwalk gives you a wonderful perspective.
I am going to critique you kind of hard here, to me it feels like you can take the criticism and you understand that it is coming from a helping perspective.
That being said, this is only my opinion and is not the final word about what is right and what is wrong.
1. You have good action going on here, puck going in the net, players celebrating, etc. You also are shooting from the rafters/cat walk which gives you the benefit of unique angles. What you don't have is congruity. The frame is at an angle...half of the net is cut off and two of the Minnesota players are cut off. There isn't any way that you would be able to crop this to save it in my honest opinion. What you do have is a good white balance. Exposure wise it could stand to come up about 1/3-1/2 stop.
2. There isn't enough action in this shot...the players are too far from each other, the defense isn't applying any heat to the offense. Action wise it is rather bland. Although you did a better job of getting faces and pucks in the picture, the height/angle that you were shooting from inhibits your chances of getting clear shots of their faces. You had mentioned in your previous post that the glass is really dirty at the arena...since you are a student you should see if you can get access to the rink before they start doing warmups. If you can get on the ice, take some windex with you and clean the ice side of the glass in a few different locations. Try using that magic eraser product...it works wonders! Once you have those locations cleaned mark, from the outside of the rink, the shooting location with gaffers tape and an arrow pointing to the clean spot of glass! Since it is a big arena you would probably be shooting from the corners where they run the zamboni's in and out of.
3. Again there is good action but it is hard to put it into perspective. Here is one time that you are in too tight  Besides not being square...you are also unlucky that the goalie is in an awkward position. I would also like to see the players that belong to the sticks coming in from the left and the right. The color, white balance, and exposure look pretty good though!
4. This is a really good shot with great composition. Pat yourself on the back for this one. It needs a little bit of work though to sell it. You might want to contact the WCHA and see if they want to use it. To fix it: it is underexposed and the white balance is off. See how gray the ice is...it should be white. What white balance settings were you using? If you aren't setting up a custom white balance it would be very advantageous for you to do so.
5. Excellent white balance and exposure! Good job. Better view of the goalies face and action from the puck. This is the best action photo of the bunch. Too bad for you it's for the wrong team.
6. To be honest doesn't do much of anything for me. It is a boring shot, no action, weird angle, no stick, no puck, player looks off balance and has his eyes closed. The white balance and exposure look pretty good though!
7. Like you said it is a little OOF because of the DOF. As well, the frame isn't square and the white balance and exposure are off. Next time make sure that you are shooting square...the red goal line should be straight, not at an angle. If you are shooting stuff at the goal try not to cut off the edges of the crease (the blue area where the goalie is at).
Like I said before, I offer this critique only to be helpful...not to discourage you. Get out there and shoot some more. As long as you are learning every time that you are out there, you will be in good shape. I look forward to seeing your future work.
Isaiah
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