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p.1 #1 · Beach Silhouettes


Hi All,

I've also added this one in to the Canon Autumn Thread - but keen to gather some critque on it.

I'm fairly happy with the result, but after the comments, feedback and critical eye!

Fire away...

Cheers
Ben








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Oct 06, 2012 at 05:10 PM
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p.1 #2 · Beach Silhouettes


It's an interesting image. You might touch-up the upper edge of the kite.

Another possibility is to mine a rather different human interest image with a heavy crop and a partial repositioning and smidgeon of creative shadow re-touching:









Oct 06, 2012 at 07:35 PM
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p.1 #3 · Beach Silhouettes


+1 @ interesting pic.

The silhouette / shimmer is contrast with the sky is a rendering that is atypical. After I chew on the creative license, I'm left feeling that the kite doesn't have enough negative space around it. Not sure if you have any to add, but you might consider cropping some of the negative space below the man down a bit to rebalance things somewhat.

I'm kinda diggin' the kite shadow in the LLC ... and lost it due to the crop, but I think the need to rebalance things overrides the inclusion of the shadow. I did try to place the crop so that you still have some tonal lines to LLC that coincide with the man's shadow though.

An alternative might be to clone the kite to a different position.
















Oct 06, 2012 at 09:59 PM
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p.1 #4 · Beach Silhouettes


Cheers guys, interesting to see the different views on composition.
Oct 07, 2012 at 04:23 PM
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p.1 #5 · Beach Silhouettes


I don't get this type of image but reading the replies helps me understand the message better.


Oct 07, 2012 at 04:42 PM
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p.1 #6 · Beach Silhouettes


I can't see beyond the irresponsible kite flier.
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p.1 #7 · Beach Silhouettes


silvawispa wrote:
I can't see beyond the irresponsible kite flier.


Eh ?
Not sure what that adds.


Oct 08, 2012 at 11:16 AM
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p.1 #8 · Beach Silhouettes


the888account wrote:
silvawispa wrote:
I can't see beyond the irresponsible kite flier.


Eh ?
Not sure what that adds.
It adds that photos, especially those containing humans, are more than just technical exercises of composition and technique.

It also means that your photograph has successfully elicited an emotional response, albeit a negative one.

My immediate response to the photo, in order, were:
1)Harsh processing
2)What is the guy with the kite thinking?


Oct 08, 2012 at 12:32 PM
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p.1 #9 · Beach Silhouettes


Thanks Dmac.

Noted with the processing, although I did fairly little to it believe it or not from the camera raw.

- Re-adjusted the white balance
- Slight crop
- Dropped the shadows a bit to help black the figures out
- Upped the exposure on the kite
- Cloned out a figure which I thought was distracting (Some chap with a backpack, standing in the middle of the frame)

I'm not sure I agree with the health and safety views of the guy with the kite to be honest.

Beach is about 2 miles long, few hundred meters wide and most people were watching him vs running for cover. So, plenty of room to be honest.

Cheers
Oct 08, 2012 at 12:54 PM
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p.1 #10 · Beach Silhouettes


That said, due to the composition of the shot, which has been your choice, it looks like the people are in the danger zone.

That means the image makes me, and others, uncomfortable.

That's the story your picture tells us, who weren't there.

Listen or don't listen, it's all the same.
Oct 08, 2012 at 01:52 PM
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p.1 #11 · Beach Silhouettes


Fair enough - appreciate the feedback, which is what I was after.

Cheers
Oct 08, 2012 at 08:22 PM
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