Big issue is the noise. I was shooting myself here, self portraits on a slow day, and missed the focus on almost all of my shots. I want to revisit the concept but with a model, that way I can focus on the composition of the photo.
As you mentioned, the focus isn't on and your choice of selective coloring draws my eye there.
It's almost a pic of the sign that you got in the way of...
Maybe step away from the background a bit more to allow more background separation. If you use this for your avitar, you ought to crop it square to avoid the distortion.
