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p.1 #1 · Joyce - C & C


Hi Everyone,

This is the first time I posted here looking for C & C. I'm looking for ideas on how I can improve.

Here are a couple of shots of my girlfriend's younger sister.

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Gear: D700, SB-900, Softlighter II and white reflector.

Thanks for looking,
Victor



Feb 07, 2012 at 09:59 AM
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p.1 #2 · Joyce - C & C


I think these are pretty nice. The lighting in the first, and this is my tastse, I think is a bit hot. Especially her forehead. Other than that, I like that head shot. I like everythnig about the second. Your girlfriend's sister is Very pretty .


Feb 07, 2012 at 03:37 PM
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p.1 #3 · Joyce - C & C


Very nice. I would have increased the DOF on #1. Not sure your aperture there but looks very nice and refine as is.


Feb 07, 2012 at 08:39 PM
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p.1 #4 · Joyce - C & C


I like #2 more. I would have backed up and used a longer focal length on #1. I also feel like the left side of the frame is dead space. I'd go square. I agree that it's a bit hot on the lighting.


Feb 07, 2012 at 09:36 PM
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p.1 #5 · Joyce - C & C


I disagree with the dead space comment. Having that space allowed you to direct to her face... where a square wouldve just thrown you to the eyes immediately. Good shots.


Feb 07, 2012 at 10:49 PM
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p.1 #6 · Joyce - C & C


i like both shots very much. I think the perspective of the 1st one is fitting for the composition. The lighting is a sliver, and it may even just be my monitor, hot around the cheek. But really pleasing photograph.

the second feels great, a little distracted by the brightness of the watch and arm area around the watch, but very minor. Nice conversion for this pose and great expression.



Feb 08, 2012 at 07:28 AM
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p.1 #7 · Joyce - C & C


#1 - Nice natural facial angle and lighting pattern on the face. But it is overexposed with the red channel starting to clip in the skin highlights. That's what gives the skin the flat waxy burned out look in the highlights. Highlight values change from RAW > JPG and to anticipate this change you need to start at capture in RAW about 1/3 stop underexposed so the skin highlights in your 900 x 600 JPG at the end of the workflow will look normal.

#2 - Here the camera position relative to the face is making the far side disappear which I find to be less flattering than the more balanced angle in #1.

When creating a pose give some thought to what are the "stars" of the show and what distracts from them. Here in this pose the face and the profiled breast are the stars and the arms are distractions, especially the one in the foreground.

Bare arms and hands are always distractions from the face on a dark background. To eliminate the distraction of the arms use long sleeve clothing. To eliminate the distraction of the hands don't put them in a H&S crop unless they are: 1) doing something interesting (like selling watches, 2) and are close to the face to avoid a ping-pong dynamic between face and hand. In that regard the hands and arms are well placed in the shot, and the The arm in back contrasts and frames the face, but her arm pit is not her most attractive feature and it comes across a bit like a print ad selling watches and deodorant at the same time.




Feb 08, 2012 at 08:27 AM
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p.1 #8 · Joyce - C & C


cgardner wrote:
#1 - Nice natural facial angle and lighting pattern on the face. But it is overexposed with the red channel starting to clip in the skin highlights. That's what gives the skin the flat waxy burned out look in the highlights. Highlight values change from RAW > JPG and to anticipate this change you need to start at capture in RAW about 1/3 stop underexposed so the skin highlights in your 900 x 600 JPG at the end of the workflow will look normal.

#2 - Here the camera position relative to the face is making the far side disappear which
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interesting comments ^^



Feb 08, 2012 at 02:00 PM
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p.1 #9 · Joyce - C & C


1 - I'd go ahead and clone more of a catchlight in the cam L eye.
2 - I think the head to cam angle could be improved.



Feb 08, 2012 at 02:50 PM





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