If I'm honest, I think I find the left edge a bit distracting, I think I would have cropped off the intruding bits/background up to the triangle bit of the table. (Or else cloned them out.) Apart from that, it's got a lovely dof/atmosphere and tells a story, so bravo.
Welcome! Ian, I agree with Suse on all counts. Great story telling--and the dof is good. I also agree that some of the bits/pieces detract and distract a bit. Not too late to fix them either. Will look forward to more of your entries.
Jane
If I'm honest, I think I find the left edge a bit distracting, I think I would have cropped off the intruding bits/background up to the triangle bit of the table. (Or else cloned them out.) Apart from that, it's got a lovely dof/atmosphere and tells a story, so bravo.
Thank you for your honesty and kindness . The WA pics are so great I almost didn't enter this week. I really struggled with the theme of sin, but I think many people did. Thanks again for the constructive critique.
ironabike wrote:
Welcome! Ian, I agree with Suse on all counts. Great story telling--and the dof is good. I also agree that some of the bits/pieces detract and distract a bit. Not too late to fix them either. Will look forward to more of your entries.
Jane
Jane,
Thank you for taking the time to reply. Your honesty is greatly appreciated and so is your kindness concerning this pic. I've taken your suggestions and edited my OP. It does look a little better. Still, it's nothing like yours. Wow! Be careful who you show that to - it'll cause nightmares.
Judging by the unusually low number of entries (so far at least...) and my own lack of inspiration on this one, I would agree that this was a very difficult topic. You handled it very well, capturing a nice image that tells a story.
Judging by the unusually low number of entries (so far at least...) and my own lack of inspiration on this one, I would agree that this was a very difficult topic. You handled it very well, capturing a nice image that tells a story.
Ed
Thanks, Ed. My first few attempts at this were way off the mark, too cluttered and obscure. So your comments are nice to hear .
twoshadows wrote:
This is a bump for a picture change - I'm hoping Fred noitices before the deadline .
Thanx,
Ian
I don't think that you will need the bump in order to get noticed. After all the tweaking that you have done, you have a very good entry; right on target for the WA. Good luck with your first entry.
relms wrote:
I don't think that you will need the bump in order to get noticed. After all the tweaking that you have done, you have a very good entry; right on target for the WA. Good luck with your first entry.
Robert
Sorry about the bump - I can see that the weekly entries has been updated. Til then I wasn't sure, and with all the changes I got a little nervous. Thanks for the guidance and the good words.
gvarma wrote:
Simple image, but well conveyed. IMHO I preferred the image with just the rings in color. But thats up tp you anyway.
Thanks, Gotsy. I really struggled with this pic and finally settled on this one - although I could have just as easily kept the version you spoke of. In the end, I'll be happy to make the finals . Thanks for taking the time to reply.
