I like the evocative connection you captured here, and the black and white conversion is nice.
My only notes would be to pay a little better attention to the lighting, more specifically the spot of light on the tip of her nose which is blown out, as well as the blown out highlight on the right side of her face (camera right). I think rotating yours and her position so that the lighting from behind had a more subtle touch would give you better lighting, in my opinion.
While in agreement with DanielScott about the blown-out areas (fixable in post, I believe), I like her skin, the toning, her direct gaze, depth of field, freckles (is she a ginger?), and the photographer selfie.
DanielScott wrote:
I like the evocative connection you captured here, and the black and white conversion is nice.
My only notes would be to pay a little better attention to the lighting, more specifically the spot of light on the tip of her nose which is blown out, as well as the blown out highlight on the right side of her face (camera right). I think rotating yours and her position so that the lighting from behind had a more subtle touch would give you better lighting, in my opinion.
GoodEgg wrote:
While in agreement with DanielScott about the blown-out areas (fixable in post, I believe), I like her skin, the toning, her direct gaze, depth of field, freckles (is she a ginger?), and the photographer selfie.
Thank you so much. I am not sure if she is a ginger or not—met her at the local coffee shop, and her hair was black with purple and blue streaks.
Agreed with Daniel as well. If the two of you just rotated so the sun was not on her face, the focus would be completely on her eyes, face, and then hair. But as it is, the side of her face competes for attention even with her eyes. A viewer's eyes are always drawn to the brightest spot in the image. That's why, in post, I would even tone down the brightness of those buttons on her collar.
Aside from that, I really love this! It's evocative, as someone has already mentioned.
friscoron wrote:
Agreed with Daniel as well. If the two of you just rotated so the sun was not on her face, the focus would be completely on her eyes, face, and then hair. But as it is, the side of her face competes for attention even with her eyes. A viewer's eyes are always drawn to the brightest spot in the image. That's why, in post, I would even tone down the brightness of those buttons on her collar.
Aside from that, I really love this! It's evocative, as someone has already mentioned.
Dneufarth wrote:
My style team was asleep at the wheel;-)
I think it works for this pic It's just something I always notice after taking pics of my girls and think I need to do next time. It never seems to pop out to me while I'm taking the pics, just after I've taken them.