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derthax
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p.1 #1 · Senior Session Today


A shot from a senior session today.... what are your suggestions for improvement?? Thanks!

Shutter Speed: 1/100
Aperture: f/5
50mm
ISO: 100



http://www.deronthaxton.com/_i/grad1.jpg



Jan 27, 2008 at 10:51 PM
Bob Jarman
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p.1 #2 · Senior Session Today


I find her feet distracting - guess I'm more of a traditionalist. Otherwise I like the pose - delightful smile.

On this monitor her left arm, from mid-forearm to elbow has a strong orange cast - about the same color as her heel.

Perhaps show more detail in the hair.

my 2-cents,

Bob

EDIT: At home on a calibrated monitor I can clearly see the mortar board and detail in her hair - perhaps I shouldn't be doing this at work

Edited on Jan 28, 2008 at 08:09 PM



Jan 28, 2008 at 08:48 AM
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p.1 #3 · Senior Session Today


I too find the feet distracting, although I like the concept and creativity. However, your shooting angle combined with the loosely draped clothing and her bent knees make her look about 3' tall. Also, does she have something between her teeth?


-Andrew



Jan 30, 2008 at 09:57 AM
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p.1 #4 · Senior Session Today


For the most part, I like it. I don't necessarily find the feet distracting, but maybe a shot without the feet, ie have her swing her legs closer to you a smidge and then lie fer feet flat on the ground and shoot just the upper body. In general, I like that pose better.

Also, not sure how other feel about it, but the tilted head is what really throws me for a loop. Have her straighten her head out and keep her face towards the camera. Maybe have her cover the potentially exposed cleavage too... Hope that helps!



Jan 30, 2008 at 06:07 PM
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p.1 #5 · Senior Session Today


I am a complete newbie here but the way her gown falls there is a good amount of skin showing below the neck. I don't know if that can processed out or not but it adds a likely unwanted element there.


Jan 31, 2008 at 02:27 PM





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