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Sep 12, 2022 at 09:10 AM

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I love her expressiveness, and the shoulder-forward is one of my very favorite portrait poses, but a big detail that is really nagging at me is that there is no discernible light in her eye. This is a big thing for me, otherwise without the light in the eyes I tend to find them to be lifeless.

Sep 12, 2022 at 02:19 PM

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DanielScott wrote:
I love her expressiveness, and the shoulder-forward is one of my very favorite portrait poses, but a big detail that is really nagging at me is that there is no discernible light in her eye. This is a big thing for me, otherwise without the light in the eyes I tend to find them to be lifeless.

Daniel, thank you for the feedback, I added a second version above to address the issue. It might help, but I am sure it isn’t ideal. Please let me know what you think.

Sep 12, 2022 at 07:22 PM

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Dneufarth wrote:
Daniel, thank you for the feedback, I added a second version above to address the issue. It might help, but I am sure it isn’t ideal. Please let me know what you think.

I think the new edit definitely improves the shot.

I hope it doesn't come across as if I'm saying it's a bad shot, because it's definitely really good. Sometimes I have the same problem on some of my favorite shots, but this is only one detail regarding a portrait that has so many other great qualities as well already.

Sep 13, 2022 at 04:29 AM

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DanielScott wrote:
I think the new edit definitely improves the shot.

I hope it doesn't come across as if I'm saying it's a bad shot, because it's definitely really good. Sometimes I have the same problem on some of my favorite shots, but this is only one detail regarding a portrait that has so many other great qualities as well already.

Thank you Daniel, I think it is an improvement also, and next time I shoot on such an overcast day I will certainly use some means to create better catchlights. I always respect and appreciate your feedback. There are a few other images from this set that I would like to post here, but I can’t figure out the modesty rules for the forum.

Sep 13, 2022 at 05:11 AM

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p.1 #6 · p.1 #6 · Marah in B&W

It's a striking photo for sure and I agree about a catchlight. To me, the image has a lot of tension. My eyes keep going back and forth between the face and tattoo. Maybe that's your intension, but I see two subjects competing for attention. The foreshortening of the shoulder makes it almost as big as the face and the tattoo can't be ignored. I've got 3 eyes staring at me! (lol) Keep in mind this is all personal opinion and preferences.

If the main subject is the face, maybe find a way to downplay the tattoo a bit.

Sep 13, 2022 at 08:39 AM

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story_teller wrote:
It's a striking photo for sure and I agree about a catchlight. To me, the image has a lot of tension. My eyes keep going back and forth between the face and tattoo. Maybe that's your intension, but I see two subjects competing for attention. The foreshortening of the shoulder makes it almost as big as the face and the tattoo can't be ignored. I've got 3 eyes staring at me! (lol) Keep in mind this is all personal opinion and preferences.

If the main subject is the face, maybe find a way to downplay the tattoo a bit.

Thank you very much for commenting. There is actually even a third face just below the bottom face in the image.

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Sep 15, 2022 at 10:27 AM

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p.1 #8 · p.1 #8 · Marah in B&W

Brilliant work!

Sep 28, 2022 at 11:54 PM


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