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Alex Phan
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p.1 #1 · p.1 #1 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

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Oct 22, 2019 at 01:32 PM

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p.1 #2 · p.1 #2 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

She's pretty!

Oct 22, 2019 at 01:54 PM

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p.1 #3 · p.1 #3 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

Nice image! Just a couple of critiques, if you are looking for any...

My eye is initially drawn to the bright area in the top left of the frame. Maybe darken that a bit and/or brighten up her face? I actually kind of like the somewhat mixed lighting on the background, so maybe lightening her face is "best."

More minor, but what's that fuzzy object to camera left at about the height of the model's nose? That along with the bird poop on the cement post could be easily cloned out.

Overall, though, great image. I think the model's pose and overall look works well, and the minor quibbles that I have are easily corrected.

Oct 22, 2019 at 02:29 PM

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p.1 #4 · p.1 #4 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

I think the whole left side of the image should be toned down, as one's eyes are always drawn to the brightest areas in the image. Also, I would usually prefer a model to have direct eye contact with the photographer. With her looking to one side, it looks as if you are shooting with another photographer - and she was looking at him. I do like the soft side lighting on her hair.

Oct 22, 2019 at 03:10 PM

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p.1 #5 · p.1 #5 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

GroovinPickle wrote:
Nice image! Just a couple of critiques, if you are looking for any...

My eye is initially drawn to the bright area in the top left of the frame. Maybe darken that a bit and/or brighten up her face? I actually kind of like the somewhat mixed lighting on the background, so maybe lightening her face is "best."

More minor, but what's that fuzzy object to camera left at about the height of the model's nose? That along with the bird poop on the cement post could be easily cloned out.

Overall, though, great image. I think the model's pose and overall look...Show more →
Thanks. Will fix it and keep that into consideration for next one.🙏🏻
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bobbytan wrote:
I think the whole left side of the image should be toned down, as one's eyes are always drawn to the brightest areas in the image. Also, I would usually prefer a model to have direct eye contact with the photographer. With her looking to one side, it looks as if you are shooting with another photographer - and she was looking at him. I do like the soft side lighting on her hair.
Thanks for the input Bobby. 🙏🏻

Oct 22, 2019 at 05:52 PM

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p.1 #6 · p.1 #6 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

Stunning!

Oct 22, 2019 at 06:33 PM

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p.1 #7 · p.1 #7 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

For your first time out, not bad at all. Lighting looks nice, skin tones look pretty good. I would clean up the bird droppings on the cement.

The pose, not a fan, the hands are the first thing my eyes gravitate towards. Going forward, take your time and build the pose. Her right hand could be crossed over the left while leaning... anything which is close to the camera looks bigger. Her right hand really jumps out... at least, how I see the image.

That being said, some minor posing corrections and you are well on your way.
Hatch

Oct 22, 2019 at 09:28 PM

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p.1 #8 · p.1 #8 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

There are some cloning issues on the top right of her head all the way to the edge of the image and on the left side about eye level and 3 inches to the left as mentioned. I think I like the pose you posted in the Sony a7r4 thread better, but this pose is not bad. Gorgeous model.

Oct 22, 2019 at 10:06 PM

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p.1 #9 · p.1 #9 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

Alex Phan wrote:
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Alex, this is a very beautiful image of a wonderful Model/girl/senior/friend etc!
The composition is good as is the crop.
It's actually very good considering that your whole Flickr is all BIRDS!!! LoL
Where she's looking is to me irrelevant. I shoot lots of models and I have them looking in all directions. You never know which will wind up being the money shot!
They don't always have to be engaging the camera/viewer.
There are some minor critiques and most have already been pointed out.
I usually subdue my backgrounds a bit. Yes the brightness can be a distraction but in this shot I de-saturated the greens and yellows. They seem less distracting that way.
Your focus appears to be off a tad. The stitching on the shirt is sharp but her eyes are a bit off, maybe use a Canon instead!!! LoL
I will say if she's a model, I tell ALL my models I will NOT shoot T-shirts or jeans, that's my rule, but that's me!!
Very nice image and nicely done. I'd be proud!!!
John

Oct 22, 2019 at 10:23 PM

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p.1 #10 · p.1 #10 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

thanks for all the pointer/tips. I appreciate it as this is new to me. Lots to learn from.

Oct 23, 2019 at 01:29 AM

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p.1 #11 · p.1 #11 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

The photograph is overall very well done, with only minor nits (personal opinions) as I am in agreement with some of what has been said. I think one thing stands out - subject matter counts. She is a lovely model, whether engaged directly with the camera or not, and for some reason human eyes are attracted to beauty of all kinds. I think this image is a great effort.

If I might be so bold - my advice is to focus on what you want to capture and convey. With those evolving ideas driving your creative efforts, continually refine and train your eye. Constructive criticism may be helpful and should be invited, but you are the author and artist and only you can truly improve what you do. I don't like trying to influence the direction a person chooses to go when creating visual art, but rather to encourage them to develop creative intent, visual craft/technique and to suggest that new challenges (what you are doing here) are a great way to extend boundaries and experiences. My few cents....

BTW, I just saw your other, more recent posting, which made me look for this one again. Both are very good work and a great foundation for more, even better work! Thanks for posting.

Oct 23, 2019 at 11:40 AM

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p.1 #12 · p.1 #12 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

My focus was instantly locked onto her beauty! Just a beautiful woman in an excellent pose. The suggestive comments were after thoughts for me...She is just so lovely to look at I missed all other comments.
Dan

Oct 25, 2019 at 10:16 AM

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p.1 #13 · p.1 #13 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

Beautiful model and pose. But it looks to me that her face is overly smoothed.

Oct 25, 2019 at 01:07 PM

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p.1 #14 · p.1 #14 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

I'd darn sure close out that bird poop below her arm

Oct 27, 2019 at 06:19 PM

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p.1 #15 · p.1 #15 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

First off, I think this is a lovely image. All of the critiques above are well taken, but I have one observation and a question for you regarding this portrait. As you may or may not know, natural light photographs take on the color cast of whatever the light passes through or reflects off of. In this case, it's the foliage. So my question to you is, have you looked at her skin tones to ensure that they're not overly influenced by the color of the surrounding foliage. I think I see a bit of a green cast, but it may not be so. Looking at her shirt, it looks like the white is true, so that tells me that her skin is also true. So it's just a question for you to consider, if you haven't already.

Once again, nice shot.

Nov 03, 2019 at 02:09 AM

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p.1 #16 · p.1 #16 · My first time outdoor portrait attempt

Two things: first, I think the model's right hand is bent at an awkward angle (not relaxed). Secondly, I agree with Bobby Tan that the model appears to be looking at another probably non-existent photographer to the right of the photo. Better if she was looking left "into" the photo. Otherwise, a nice technically well done shot and attractive model.

Nov 08, 2019 at 05:45 PM


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