Dave Dillemuth
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dbehrens wrote:
The flower definitely makes an attractive foreground. I would consider a 1x1 crop with the flower a third of the way in. I think that with the leading shoreline, water and mountain with soft light would make a nice comp.
Dave
Thanks for the input, Dave. Try as I might, in spite of appealing elements, this composition never really came together.
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claudefiddler wrote:
Dave
I may be powdering a dead horse and if so my apologies. There's this look, referred to as layering, that seems to get a lot of use. I look at layering so called as stacking items of interest in a composition. It leads to the eye moving up and down in an image but not through the image. The advice comes up to move the center of attention left or right of center, which does not add any movement to a composition it just moves the subject left or right in the frame. Movement has to be a part of the landscape, recognized and composed. In your photo the eye is lead out and right and out of the frame. An element that curves, turns or diagonals back to Split Mountain is needed. It may not have been there and you did the best with what was available.
Also, the seductive use of a wide angle lens can curve elements in the frame but that is not recognizing and translating three dimensional movement into two dimensions. For me this can be seen in near far compositions where the near has little to do with the far. It's just that a wide angle lens made it possible to plant something in the foreground. I mention this not as a comment of this particular photo but as something to be aware of in the type of photos that you make. Elements in the frame leaning side to side and back or curving unnaturally are not attractive.
Your shooting stars seem really sharp! Otherwordly so compared to the softer feel of the rest of the image. The leaning tree/s in the mid-ground looks off to me with no detail and too dark. Middle ground is a merged tonality. Need to see into the water more just off the bank. Area around the flower is unnaturally bright. I'd tone the magenta down a bit too.
Your photo looks sharp and detailed and well color balanced.
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Claude,
Thanks very much for the detailed input/critique.I appreciate your comment on "layering". Unfortunately, in this situation I was unable to come up with a composition with any compelling leading lines. As far as sharpness, it was shot at f/16 and is sharp throughout. I did apply some Orton effect and that maybe what you're seeing.
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