And the Heavens open - Edited BW included.
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roguecoolman
Registered: Jul 07, 2005
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Hello All,

I've been working on this image for a while. I kept tinkering with it to get it to taste. This was taken during that "one" magical day .



Heavens Opened by Jason Chong's Photography, on Flickr

**EDIT**

Following some advice, I've been working on BW conversions. I really wanted the clouds darker to convey a more brooding mood.


#2. BW conversion of the colored version, no crop adjustment.


Heavens Opened - BW #1 by Jason Chong's Photography, on Flickr


#3 - I went with a tighter crop as suggested. It does put more focus on the light rays. I do loose the deer though. I know the deers were small, but I like photos with little tidbits of interesting things to look at.


Heavens Opened - BW #2 by Jason Chong's Photography, on Flickr


What do you guys think? Did I darken the clouds too much? Deer or no deer?


C&C welcome,

Jason



JimFox
Registered: Jan 11, 2005
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Hey Jason,

A beautiful scene here. Love the sky opening up like that. I am thinking that a B&W version of this might be really cool, it would let the rays take a prominent role in the shot. Right now, while the fall colors are cool, I think they might detract from the rays a bit.

Jim



philtax
Registered: Dec 23, 2004
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Hi Jason,

This one is special - You caught the light perfectly and the composition sets it up beautifully.

Phil



roguecoolman
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JimFox wrote:
Hey Jason,

A beautiful scene here. Love the sky opening up like that. I am thinking that a B&W version of this might be really cool, it would let the rays take a prominent role in the shot. Right now, while the fall colors are cool, I think they might detract from the rays a bit.

Jim


Thanks Jim. I am working on a BW, still tweaking it to taste



roguecoolman
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philtax wrote:
Hi Jason,

This one is special - You caught the light perfectly and the composition sets it up beautifully.

Phil



Thanks Phil!



Scott Kroeker
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Very nice! Looking forward to the BW conversion.



Fred Miranda
Registered: Dec 31, 2001
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Great shot Jason. It would be nice to see a B&W version but it works great as it is. The comp may also benefit from a tighter crop as the sun rays play a much bigger role than the deer.
Best,
Fred



Jeffrey
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Definitely worthy of posting! The deer is a bit small to actually see at first, so I agree with Fred.



Charlie Shugart
Registered: Feb 06, 2007
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Jason,
Lots of good things going on here.
As others have alluded, there might be several "pictures within the picture."
As presented here, I surely like this.
The morning clouds breaking up just enough to let a few rays sneak in. Hooha! Nice.
For my taste, I think I'd prefer the clouds and Glacier Point to be a bit darker and contrastier, but that's a small nit.
Charlie



roguecoolman
Registered: Jul 07, 2005
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Thanks Scott, Fred, Jeffrey and Charlie.

Fred & Jeffrey: I did work a different crop cutting out the deer.

Charlie: Are the clouds dark enough for you

Jason



RileyJoseph
Registered: Sep 21, 2011
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I agree on the tighter crop. The mountain and the sun rays have such a good texture in the B&W the foreground really does nothing for me.
Great capture.



Lee Wiren
Registered: Nov 22, 2007
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I'm going to go against the grain here, while I do like the B/W versions... I don't think the color is bad here and like the deer... my eye hit the rays then trailed down to the deer and loved it.

Really great shot!

Lee



Scott Kroeker
Registered: Jan 10, 2008
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I like the conversions and though the deer are a nice touch the tighter crop just is more pleasing to the eyes!



maneatingshark
Registered: May 19, 2011
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Nice light! I do agree that the crop tightens things up, I didn't even notice the deer until you mentioned it! Looks great though.



roguecoolman
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Thanks All for the comments and suggestions!

Jason



Jeffrey
Registered: Nov 12, 2002
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You're on the right track, Jason. I think even more crop is appropriate.