Devyn's Senior Portrait
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Draper
Registered: Apr 23, 2010
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Just a shot from my session Saturday. Thanks for looking.


Devyn by DraperStudios, on Flickr



squareeyez
Registered: Jan 22, 2006
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she's beautiful; you shot her well. I'd like to see the dark areas a bit lighter but her beauty steals the show



brianclary
Registered: Sep 12, 2012
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That's gorgeous! Maybe darken her front arm a little bit, so the eye is drawn more to her face?



Steady Hand
Registered: Dec 03, 2007
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Hi,

My comments or suggestions below are not a criticism of you, your model, your talent or skill. I offer them in a friendly tone of voice and with the sole intent to help you with a second POV and set of eyes. If you read sincere questions and simple suggestions as "criticism" of you, then you will miss how I am trying to help you.

Of course this may be your own "style" or your own "vision" and I suppose we can assume that the images look just like they do because that is exactly how you like them. That is OK too. It just shows that there are differences of "opinion" on what looks good. IF these are exactly what you want and like, then by all means continue making your images look like that and have fun doing it. I can only speak for myself and what I do or do not find appealing in the posted photos. As I always say: "Follow your own muse."
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Another nice portrait by you...as usual.

Well done!

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What do I not like?

I don't really like the claw hand (her left hand), as the finger catches the light and draws my eye to that claw shape.

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I hope these comments help you.



Prevelige
Registered: Dec 04, 2011
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An absolutely beautiful woman, nicely captured. My only thought is that the tip of her nose and upper lip look a bit bright to me. A bit of darkening would help to my eye.



friscoron
Registered: Oct 07, 2009
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Lovely subject, and for the most part, I really like your lighting. My only suggestion is that it looks like the lighting is set up to largely light both eyes equally, but her left eye is well-lit and her right eye is not as well lit. You could probably fix that with some pp, but that's me, my style, my vision. For you, this might be perfect as it is.

Nicely done!



neighbourboy
Registered: Dec 09, 2005
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Hi Aaron, nice to see a post from you. I've always loved your work a lot. But I have to confess that this particular shot didn't strike me with as much admiration and I usually feel from your shots. I think the first thing I noticed was similar to what Ron says above where the main light is coming from her right, but that right eye being dark just feels odd to me, even though I know it's because of the hair. But that's really a nit pick and it's just because you've set the bar so high ;-)

--David



CW100
Registered: Apr 03, 2009
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good lighting and pose



misternikko
Registered: Nov 05, 2009
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reminds me of stacey dash from clueless back in the day.

love what you did with the lighting and what it in turn did with her eyes.

very well done, thanks for sharing!



bobbyv
Registered: Feb 23, 2010
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Like it...but the background is trying to steal the show.



G Ric
Registered: Jan 08, 2007
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i like it. i like her expression and pose. maybe have her step forward a few steps to get the bg slightly blurred more. thanks for sharing.