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Bob Jarman
Registered: Feb 04, 2007
Total Posts: 6211
Country: United States

A starting point - thought and suggestions appreciated.

Thanks,

Bob



Jo Dilbeck
Registered: Dec 20, 2007
Total Posts: 2399
Country: United States

Lighten up moms face a bit, I think it's too much in shadow. Not as bright as the baby, but just a little more. The vignette is a wee too dark for my taste.

Lovely photo of the two of them though!

Jo



sbeme
Registered: Dec 23, 2003
Total Posts: 17303
Country: United States

Sorry Bob, I dont like this one. The baby's head right in front of the middle of Mom's face creates an awkward juxtaposition and doesnt do justice to the warmth of the actual scene. While natural, there is something odd looking about Mom's fingers as well. Maybe it's that we just see three. Maybe its that we only see one fully. I dont think this is a keeper.
But I am sure you will and have had other opportunities.
Scott



AuntiPode
Registered: Aug 05, 2008
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Country: New Zealand

Or, perhaps take it further?



Bob Jarman
Registered: Feb 04, 2007
Total Posts: 6211
Country: United States

Jo,

Thanks for looking and your suggestion. At the moment I'm inclined more toward darker, somewhat like AutiPode's re-work.

This one needs some soak time.

Bob

Jo Dilbeck wrote:
Lighten up moms face a bit, I think it's too much in shadow. Not as bright as the baby, but just a little more. The vignette is a wee too dark for my taste.

Lovely photo of the two of them though!

Jo



Bob Jarman
Registered: Feb 04, 2007
Total Posts: 6211
Country: United States

Scott,

What intrigued me was they're both looking in the same direction.

I'm not pleased with the minimal coverage of Abby's face but think Karen has done more to bring it out.

But yes, in comparison to some others, most likely will relegate to the trash bin unless something pops out - intend to revisit Welcome To Oz 2 , image #1 for some ideas.

Bob

sbeme wrote:
Sorry Bob, I dont like this one. The baby's head right in front of the middle of Mom's face creates an awkward juxtaposition and doesnt do justice to the warmth of the actual scene. While natural, there is something odd looking about Mom's fingers as well. Maybe it's that we just see three. Maybe its that we only see one fully. I dont think this is a keeper.
But I am sure you will and have had other opportunities.
Scott



Bob Jarman
Registered: Feb 04, 2007
Total Posts: 6211
Country: United States

AuntiPode wrote:
Or, perhaps take it further?


AuntiPode,

You've read my mind

Bob



sbeme
Registered: Dec 23, 2003
Total Posts: 17303
Country: United States

Karen's rework does minimize some of the issues.
Scott



RustyBug
Registered: Feb 02, 2009
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Country: United States

Took a stab at it ... along with a haircut (crop) for the pic and a wardrobe change for mom.

I wanted to do a watercolor, but couldn't quite get it go the way I wanted, so I lazied out with some canvas on the second one.



mrchile
Registered: Oct 28, 2009
Total Posts: 2434
Country: United States

I'm inclined to agree with Scott, but thought a crop might help. It migt emphasize the eyes more.
You would need to remove the vignette first.