Hey Eager. I agree with Bob. You might try 2nd curtain synch on the pool shot (it would look more "realistic" if the blur followed the balls rather than preceeding them.
And yes, the 2nd has a morbid feel to it. Feel we need to experience the whole person (or at least the limb he/she is sitting on) to be assured there's no rope involved....
Keep playing and thinking. That's what these WAs are all about...
I didn't get what was so morbid about the second because I only saw it as legs hanging over a branch. But now I see that yeah, it's pretty suggestive that there's a noose involved. If we could see that they were sitting on a branch, that'd help, but that would obviously change your intention. Good ideas for angles though.
