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Haven't delivered to the clients yet, so please be harsh and constructive

1 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-zHc977x/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-2-XL.jpg

2 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-D6tNb3X/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-16-XL.jpg

3 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-3qcmVnR/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-46-XL.jpg

4 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-gnTN8bp/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-60-XL.jpg

5 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-ZC38WQb/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-64-XL.jpg

6 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-3Wvpwpr/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-67-XL.jpg

7 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-xDfbNxq/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-72-XL.jpg

8 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-kdxdQTj/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-77-XL.jpg

9 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-w7Dzr2d/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-105-XL.jpg

10 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-qN8cbPP/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-115-XL.jpg

11 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-97GLk8g/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-137-XL.jpg

12 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-j68CrnZ/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-192-XL.jpg

13 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-V2KJp3K/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-210-XL.jpg

14 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-fZTvhwm/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-214-XL.jpg

15 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-XkHTPFB/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-271-XL.jpg

16 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-wcLLjQ6/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-320-XL.jpg

17 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-RCwPjgT/1/XL/willowHeightsMansion-327-XL.jpg

(still working on my group portrait skills)
18 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-57CMnWH/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-376-XL.jpg

19 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-5zGRv8G/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-396-XL.jpg

20 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-4xrv5V6/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-397-XL.jpg

21 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-m4vjS9M/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-399-XL.jpg

22 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-FWmJzzt/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-424-XL.jpg

23 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-qM2wZ5G/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-435-XL.jpg

24 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-5bZXsnx/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-467-XL.jpg

25 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-zJpPvZz/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-534-XL.jpg

26 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-Q43hMVv/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-561-XL.jpg

27 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-XVBm8b2/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-566-XL.jpg

28 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-nCsNvBm/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-587-XL.jpg

29 )http://www.jamello.com/Weddings/WillowTemp/i-c5fmFNg/0/XL/willowHeightsMansion-602-XL.jpg



Aug 21, 2015 at 12:15 AM
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p.1 #2 · p.1 #2 · Latest wedding


Dang dude. This is all kinds of great.

Tagging it now so that I remember to come give critique tomorrow when I'm more competent.



Aug 21, 2015 at 01:04 AM
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Not able to do a full comment on all but off the cuff I think you could benefit from tighter cropping on a lot of these. Like #2, do we need that group of people turned away from camera on the far left?

On 4 do you need that bit of chandelier at the top that draws the eyes away from the scene?

12) could crop out the bright bridesmaids dress in the upper left, would really help to focus on the girls.

14 the flowers on the left just detract IMHO, and the chair on the right isn't great either, but if you didn't take any other versions I'd at least get rid of the flowers and live with the chair.

18) that dangling tree on the left I could live without seeing but can't really crop it out fully probably without throwing it off balance, so not sure much can be done there.

19 and 20 I'm not sure how I feel about that tree on the left, it is sort of prominent in the frame as a third subject but its not really in the frame entirely so it kind of pulls attention away IMHO. I'd like to see some without that tree or some where the tree is more evenly balanced with the couple but this is sort of in between.

Also cropping on 22, not a big deal but I think it would be cleaner to crop the sides in tighter, don't think the door knob makes it stronger and the tan strip on the left draws the eye away from the couple as well.

28) you have the girls face on the right like a ghost or easter egg?

29) crop the strip of red curtain on the right

13 + 24 could have benefited from some more depth of field, not losing much by stopping down there since the background isn't something that had to be blurred to make the shot and seems like you had enough light to stop down. Nothing can be done in post though.

I liked a lot of the emotion and light was nice on many, just think that tighter compositions would really raise it up a notch.



Aug 21, 2015 at 01:34 AM
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Darn fine set.

On pic 21 the bride's left eye looks a tiny bit bloodshot. Perhaps teasing out some of the red blood vessels or making them less red may do the trick. (She may be tired, hence the eyes).

On pic 22, (if it were me), I'd crop the shot so the edges of the door frames were gone from top and bottom.

On 24, is the groom's face a tiny bit blown on his highlighted side. Possibly brush the exposure back in a little (if your RAW software allows you to).

29, I'd retouch out the cables leading to the table and on the floor. I'd also crop / clone out the bit of red dress on the right of frame - should only take a moment to do both.

27 is wonderful. Don't let them leave without placing an order for a big framed version...!



Aug 21, 2015 at 02:02 AM
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I am sure they are going to love their photos, I enjoyed viewing this set and not much to nit pick here, honestly the only thing that jumped out at me was the wires in the last photo.


Aug 21, 2015 at 08:18 AM
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p.1 #6 · p.1 #6 · Latest wedding


Looks good!

Willow Heights Mansion?



Aug 21, 2015 at 09:37 AM
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p.1 #7 · p.1 #7 · Latest wedding


Beautiful. Especially love #27.



Aug 21, 2015 at 10:59 AM
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mikethevilla wrote:
Dang dude. This is all kinds of great.

Tagging it now so that I remember to come give critique tomorrow when I'm more competent.


I am now holding my breath.

stevez32 wrote:
Not able to do a full comment on all but off the cuff I think you could benefit from tighter cropping on a lot of these. Like #2, do we need that group of people turned away from camera on the far left?

On 4 do you need that bit of chandelier at the top that draws the eyes away from the scene?

12) could crop out the bright bridesmaids dress in the upper left, would really help to focus on the girls.

14 the flowers on the left just detract IMHO, and the chair on the right isn't great
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Thats not a full comment?! In the past I have struggled with being too tight, so have made an effort to shoot wider. I will take a look at each comment and possibly crop a few before delivery. Thanks!

leethecam wrote:
Darn fine set.

On pic 21 the bride's left eye looks a tiny bit bloodshot. Perhaps teasing out some of the red blood vessels or making them less red may do the trick. (She may be tired, hence the eyes).

On pic 22, (if it were me), I'd crop the shot so the edges of the door frames were gone from top and bottom.

On 24, is the groom's face a tiny bit blown on his highlighted side. Possibly brush the exposure back in a little (if your RAW software allows you to).

29, I'd retouch out the cables leading to the table and
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Interesting perspective, I hate retouching things like cables, but I can see the issue. On 24, I haven't blown a highlight since I got the D750. I should be able to brighten her up a touch and darken him.


sherijohnson wrote:
I am sure they are going to love their photos, I enjoyed viewing this set and not much to nit pick here, honestly the only thing that jumped out at me was the wires in the last photo.


Thanks!

Scott Mosher wrote:
Looks good!

Willow Heights Mansion?


Yup, but she was not a huge fan of the location and prefered the trees/hills.

GeoLaing wrote:
Beautiful. Especially love #27.


Thanks, I wasn't sure I was going to get the flash balanced correctly on that shot.



Aug 21, 2015 at 01:09 PM
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Don't have a lot of time so I wanted to make some quick general comments.

Overall your coverage is really solid. Very clean. And I'm certain your clients will be very happy. Technically I think the set is very consistent and very good.

I think your struggle is with composition in some ways. Again, technically clean and straight forward and if that's what you're going for, you did a great job. If you're looking for variety, I think you missed the mark a bit. The main thing that sticks out to me is that your subjects occupy almost the same amount of space in the frame the majority of the time (lot's of full body shots and the subject's height is ~75% of the height of the frame). I'd suggest getting in tighter (physically moving closer or longer FL) or moving back further would add some more interest (21 and 27 are great, but I'd probably want to show a little more of the guy and a little more of the bride's dress so she doesn't look naked on 21).

Honestly though that is really nitpicking and more of what *I* would do. I think you could really push the "technically perfect" angle as well if you wanted to move your brand that way. You are ultra consistent with no tricks/frills and there's something to be said for that.



Aug 21, 2015 at 02:19 PM
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dhp_sf wrote:
Don't have a lot of time so I wanted to make some quick general comments.

Overall your coverage is really solid. Very clean. And I'm certain your clients will be very happy. Technically I think the set is very consistent and very good.

I think your struggle is with composition in some ways. Again, technically clean and straight forward and if that's what you're going for, you did a great job. If you're looking for variety, I think you missed the mark a bit. The main thing that sticks out to me is that your subjects occupy almost the same amount of
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This was my first wedding without an assistant or second, so I was a bit overwhelmed. I was HORRID at directing the couple. I don't think they are expecting any of the portraits to come out nice. Especially the last one.

It is kinda stunning how they almost all have the same subject ratio now that you point it out. There is some more variation in the set, but they are not as good and honestly there are not enough.

I do not gravitate to "technically perfect" type images, but that is what I am better at. I wish I could do frills/artistic stuff but it does not come easy to me.



Aug 21, 2015 at 03:21 PM
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18. Gotta get the full or waist up. 14. I know you took a vert of that pose or crop it. Beautiful shot! 3. Dress shot awesome. Stairs are beautiful another vertical of course. Good stuff my man!

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Aug 21, 2015 at 08:36 PM
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Veedotcom wrote:
18. Gotta get the full or waist up. 14. I know you took a vert of that post or crop it. Beautiful shot! 3. Dress shot awesome. Stairs are beautiful another vertical of course. Good stuff my man!


18/14, got that too

Thanks



Aug 21, 2015 at 10:13 PM
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Sorry about that word "post" I meant pose!


Aug 22, 2015 at 11:14 PM





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