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I can see what you're going for, and you're in the right direction, but it's the last 10% of attention to detail that is making these fall short for me. Just not as flattering as you would expect from old Hollywood glamour. I'm guessing there is no fill card being used, which is probably a big part of it, but here are some specific areas I think you can work on for the next one:
1) The contrast is extremely high on this one and it sort of makes her look like you're going for a two-face sort of character. Look how much darker the right side of her face is, it's incredibly distracting particularly since it appears you brightened her face on the right side (left eye, cheek) substantially due to the sharp angle of your lighting and lack of bounce/fill.
2) The pose is weird, which I suppose is normal enough for Hollywood, but the lighting again could use some bounce/fill. Look at the shadow under her lip. It makes me think she has a dirty lower lip, there needs to be a more gradual fall-off of light on her face. If you're going for short-lighting, move that light further off to the side still so the shadows work for the image rather than just distract, but a bounce/fill for this type of work is pretty standard particularly for females.
3) Pretty close here but I think the light is perhaps still a bit too high - notice again the shadow under the bottom lip, and then the distracting fall-off on her arms which is so immediate.
4) Broken neck syndrome, and also watch for having the pupils way in the corner of the eyes like that, it looks really weird when 95% of what you see in the eye is whiteness. For this reason I try to instruct the subject to not look to the extremes of left/right and to look somewhere so that I can see white on either side of their pupil, even if it's just a hint. Pretty good rule of thumb, but I'm sure there are situations it doesn't apply like any rule.
Hope that's helpful - not saying I would have done better, but I would have given myself these same critiques for the next time. Keep experimenting, that's what keeps us improving after all.
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