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Well, most people here are photographers (like you) and not designers, so they donīt show their albums because they donīt focus on album design so much.
Sorry for the harsh words, Iīm German (and Germans tend to be not polite) and I got my master in visual communications.
Your layout is really bad. You miss one central point: working with a layout grid. Two examples: On spread 10, you have three differents width of white bars an on the right side it loks like the vertical bars are not aligned.
ON spread 11: At least the upper and lower border of the images are aligned, but on spread 10 you had 3 images with the sides cut off (sory, donīt kno the term) and on 11 you have three images with white space around them. You shouldnīt mix layouts randomly...
Back to the three images of spread 11, left side: it looks like the left border is smaller than the right border. Maybe you forgot the bleed, but this are things that shouldnīt happen.
Just think about some of this points. You are a great photographer, but not a book designer.