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Pictures don't have to be perfectly sharp to be appreciated. You didn't ask for a critique of the shot itself, so I'll refrain from that and focus on your processing.
I think you did a really touch up on her. Where did you with your Noise Reduction Luminance. I'm assuming at least 40. If not, go up to 40. In LR, I would process this shot twice. Once for her, which you did pretty well with, and another for the background. See how those lights to our right of her head get lost against the garage, or whatever that is, in the edited pic, but they stand out well in the SOOC pic?
With her, I would then use your Color Replacement tool in PS and replace the yellowish hue on her arm, underarm, chest and her left side of her face with her regular color. I would also lighten her eyes just a touch. Other than that, I think you're in pretty good shape.