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p.1 #11 · Need some composition help | |
Took a stab at best aspen ...
That being said, I don't think it is a vast improvement (i.e. or not as good) over your preferred rendition in the first image ... depending upon the point that you are trying to convey.
I wasn't sure if you wanted the expanse, the aspen or the peak. To me, the expanse didn't work as well because the aspen divided the scene. I've tried to retain the aspen, yet use it more of a framing element around the peak. The inclusion of the aspen & the pines help show the presence of what nature is to be embraced in this place without necessarily showing all of it, and still allows you to draw the viewer toward the "big rocks". The snippet of peak in the ULC, is intended to be suggestive of a "broader" range to be further explored, yet with little competition to pull the eye away from the dominant one.
Ideally, the message to the viewer is "Aspens & Mountains & Pines ... Oh, My."
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