Upload & Sell: Off
Agree with Russ, not bad at all. Agree about the crops from a technical standpoint, but you also have to know your audience. I don't think most people frown upon shooting RAW, unless you have a deadline or the need to process lots of photos quickly. If you're shooting to make prints, have the time to do the processing and know you'll need to do some, shooting RAW is the smarter way to go, if you ask me.
Bottom line is that you got faces, the ball, your horizons are straight, your focus is tack sharp and like Russ said, your exposure and colors look good.
Oh, and #1 doesn't work for me either...