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Overall I feel you did a great job. I think the image has a lot of good points, but there's something unnatural about her eyes. Her pupils seem to be dilated much larger than they should be for the amount of lighting on her. As others have said she's a lovely model.
It doesn't matter how much light was put on her when the shutter was pressed.
The ambient light around her must not have been enough. It's common if the modelling lamb is not bright enough.
I personally don't mind it
As I said in my post, I think is a "very good" image of a pretty model, but I feel the eyes do not look natural. I know it's a subjective thing. I showed the image to four others, without my commenting, and two of them said, "her eyes don't look right. I'm not saying the image is bad, but to me her eyes popped out to me.
to the OP, it's excellent work.