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Archive 2012 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt
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p.1 #1 · p.1 #1 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt

Spent some time with my friend Carrie and her lovely children Ty and Hailey while at the park (and celebratory pie).

Would love any feedback. All shot on a 5dII with the 85 1.8 (except the last 2 shots)

  1. Ty Flying by Z-effects, on Flickr

  2. Sibling counterbalance by Z-effects, on Flickr

  3. Hanging out by Z-effects, on Flickr

  4. Successfully scaled! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  5. Successfully scaled! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  6. Upside down Giggles by Z-effects, on Flickr

  7. Blissful Bliss by Z-effects, on Flickr

  8. Dismount Flip in motion by Z-effects, on Flickr

  9. Mother and Son by Z-effects, on Flickr

  10. More giggles! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  11. Family slide by Z-effects, on Flickr

  12. Sliding Together by Z-effects, on Flickr

  13. Sliding Laughter by Z-effects, on Flickr

  14. Hailey's turn by Z-effects, on Flickr

  15. Hide and seek (Mommy seeking) by Z-effects, on Flickr

  16. RUN RUN RUN! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  17. Catch me if you can! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  18. Caught! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  19. Her turn to hide by Z-effects, on Flickr

  20. Mommy runs like a girl by Z-effects, on Flickr

  21. Gotcha! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  22. Victory hug! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  23. Pie time fun! by Z-effects, on Flickr

  24. Time to go home by Z-effects, on Flickr

Aug 10, 2012 at 01:44 AM
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p.1 #2 · p.1 #2 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt

Hard to give feedback not knowing what your goal was. Just a fun afternoon in the park and around town? I'd say some great candids. Something for your portfolio? I'd say a few have potential, but most don't belong.

Also, If you want feedback on individual photos try picking 3-5 per post and leaving it at that. You can also link to a full album if you feel the need. No one is going to give you individual CC on 24 photos.

Aug 10, 2012 at 02:46 AM
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p.1 #3 · p.1 #3 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt

I probably have a different perspective than the last poster, but I much prefer candids to more traditional portraiture. However, this is a personal bias and let me qualify my critique by stating that I'm not a pro or a particularly good photographer. Despite liking your approach (and perhaps not being qualified to do so), I'm going to give you a fairly harsh critique because I feel with some minor changes this set would be a lot stronger.
I would be fine with more than 5 photos, but feel this set could be significantly culled. There are 5 or 6 inverted shots, and that minimizes the impact of a novel perspective.
I would really like 2 if the girl on the right was a member of the family.
If you took a step to the left, I would like 3 a lot more.
Stop down another stop or two on 9 to have mother and son both in focus
11-14 each feel slightly off regarding timing or angle
A lot of the hide and seek are difficult to find the subject and/or very centrally composed
22 and 23 are really nice moments
24 is a good conclusion to a fun day
Sorry if that was overly harsh, and please know I enjoyed the set.

Aug 10, 2012 at 06:08 AM

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p.1 #4 · p.1 #4 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt

Thank you to both you guys, harsh criticism challenges some one to move forward, coddling doesn't do much. These are also the same reasons I'll never have kids of my own...that and poop.

Aug 10, 2012 at 06:17 AM
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p.1 #5 · p.1 #5 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt

Good attitude Z

Aug 10, 2012 at 06:21 AM
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p.1 #6 · p.1 #6 · Carrie and kids first FPJ attempt


The playground shots are ok. As said before, a lot of repeats. Also, in quite a few, their faces are obscured. This works sometimes, say in #2 but not #3. However, the composition in #3 is a lot stronger.

I like #9 but the boys face bring OOF spoils it slightly. I'm not sure why it's OOF as he appears to be in the same focal plane as his mother?

I don't really feel any involvement in the hide and seek ones. I've been advised before to get involved in the action and I think that would have helped here

As a general observation on the set, the colours, exposures, and b&w conversion are all great. Quite a few could do with their verticals correcting and keep an eye on stray limbs etc dangling on the edges of the photos

This is all just my uneducated opinion, so take it all with a pinch of salt


Aug 10, 2012 at 06:55 AM

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