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warp10
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p.1 #1 · p.1 #1 · Hair


The monthly assignment is hair. Once again, I'm undecided on which to enter. Your comments are welcome. Thanks Steve




  Canon EOS 30D    70mm    f/2.8    1/200s    100 ISO    0.0 EV  






  Canon EOS 30D    50mm    f/2.8    1/200s    100 ISO    0.0 EV  




Feb 27, 2012 at 03:56 AM
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p.1 #2 · p.1 #2 · Hair


First.
Trimmer at the edge of the hair says the theme. Love the intensity of his expression. Wish you had a bit more DOF.
Second evokes The Thinker, pulls towards his pose despite being soft there. Ear is pretty red and intensified by the backlighting. If you want this about hair, consider a crop upper third of the hand. The pose and lengthy strong diagonal of the arm no longer pulls the eye to the face and instead the eye goes more to the brighter textures of the hair on the right.
Good luck.
Scott

Edited on Feb 27, 2012 at 08:14 AM · View previous versions



Feb 27, 2012 at 04:15 AM
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p.1 #3 · p.1 #3 · Hair


Definitely the 1st one.

The prop makes it unmistakable as to what the subject is. The second can be simply a contemplative portrait.

"What's the point?" and "What are you trying to convey to your viewer?" It can be very easy for you to know what the point/subject is, but often times we have to help our viewer see our message more than we might otherwise think (since we already know what it is).

The lighting seems to divide my attention (chin/upper lip/nose/lower cheek) a bit, but I'm with Scott @ #1.



Feb 27, 2012 at 05:03 AM
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p.1 #4 · p.1 #4 · Hair


Thanks guys. I think I agree with you both.

Steve



Feb 27, 2012 at 12:53 PM
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I like the first shot better, but find it a bit static due the the straight up/down orientation. Also the lighting isn't "spotlighting" the action. I offer this quick edit for comparison on this points:







I rotated the image 20 to the right, brightened the area around the clippers and darkened the top to put the action area in the spot light as best I could. I sharpened the focal point and blurred the edges for the same reason to pull and hold the viewer where the action is.



Feb 27, 2012 at 02:58 PM





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