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There's no problem posting more than one photo per thread, the restriction on the forum is creating one new thread per day...
I find it much easier to critique when a sequence of shots is presented, especially for portraits where a minor shift in camera angle and make a big difference in the appearance of the face, such as here where waiting for her to look more to the right or moving your camera position to the right would have resulted in a more flattering and interesting (for us who don't know her) profile or oblique view of the face we could better connect to.
Something I encourage people to do is to think and shoot "cinematically" in the way viewers are pulled closer to action creating stronger emotional reactions vs the sequence of wide, medium, close-up and "cutaway" (seen from the POV of the subject in the other views) shots.
Again my edit was based on being an establishing shot, but alone it its not telling an interesting story. So please do go ahead and post a few of the other shots you took before /after that one to complete the story of the walk at the beach.
More often than not in a situation like that when I'm out with the camera it will be some small detail seen close-up or some fleeting candid moment that captures my attention. Then what I'll do after getting the "photo of opportunity" is to created the other point of views that which when added to the story before the close-up will give the close-up the needed context. The wide establishing shot that becomes the start of my series is often the last one I take because I've started close and back up for the med and wide views.
I learned that trick shooting weddings for a master storyteller. We'd only take a few time exposures on a tripod during the ceremony during lulls in the action where there was little movement to set the scene. Then after the ceremony we'd go back up to the altar, by pre-arrangement, and recreate nicely flash lit medium and close-up shots of the key events like the ring exchange and the expressions on the faces (cut aways showing the bride as seen by the groom, etc.). When blended together in the album the wide, medium and close-up. The fact that many of the shots were staged after the fact wasn't obvious or even noticed because they told the story so effectively in a way that a person picking up the album 20 years later would be feel like they were watching the events unfold in person — as in a movie.... Hence the term "cinematic approach"...